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I'd have written "…would be glad to receive a critique of an error-littered presentation." I don't know that you need the possessive at all. Or since she knows the gender of the applicant, it's okay to use either his or her.

Using periods instead of hyphens is more of a presentation choice than an error. It's become pretty common here (to the point of being mundane) to use them in telephone numbers.